Monday, September 20, 2010

Writescape Seminar - Active Voice Part 1


Today's muse: Write to Win seminar with Ruth E. Walker and Dorothea Helms

Prompt: Write using an active voice, beginning with "The rain poured down...".

This was a good exercise for me, as I tend to write in a passive voice. The other prompt was "Mickey fights real dirty", which I will use in a future piece. But for now ...

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Rain

The rain poured down in fat drops, plopped onto the front step in almighty splashes. She fumbled with the key, spouted colourful words punctuated with kicks to the door. Raven hair, curled with such care this morning, now hung like burnt spaghetti in her eyes.

She’d kill him for locking her out like this.



2 comments:

glnroz said...

each of of these little snippets seem like a whole book..

Spook The Scribbler said...

Tee hee, a very amusing picture it is too! Very nicely done!