Sunday, February 20, 2011

The Echos



Today's muse: Stony River

The prompt for Microfiction Monday #71:



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The Echos

Though she tried with all her might, the deafening echo of her stomping feet couldn’t drown the voices that ruled in her mind.

24 comments:

Pat said...

Excellent! I love the contrast of the real-life noise with the only-in-her-mind noise.

Melanie Sherman said...

The stomping feet--she is running from those voices, right? Shivers.

Peggy said...

Hearing voices must be so hard.
She won't be able to run fast enough. Sad for sure but well written!

Anyes said...

Aww, how hard it has to be. Poor her, noise inside and outside never any peace :-(

erik said...

Such tragedy in such few words. Really great.

Greyscale Territory said...

Amazing how the mind tunes in to impact of sound effects far beyond the sound! Creative!

Deborah said...

Brilliant!

Linda O'Connell said...

Hi MOnica,
I am new to micro fictiona nd want to give it a try, Discovered your blog and signed on, please sign on mine http://lindaoconnell.blogspot.com/

glnroz said...

A+,,,you're grinning because you know that i am right on this,,,,

Ashling said...

Feels a little Edgar Allen Poe--in the best way...what are the voices saying?

Monica Manning said...

@Pat: Sometimes it's hard to distinguish between the two.

@Melanie: She is. Let's hope she outruns them!

@Peggy: Geez, Peggy! I was sure she would. Now you've got ME scared!

@Anyes: No, there isn't.

@erik: Thanks, Erik. Always a pleasure when you drop by.

Monica Manning said...

@Grayscale: Isn't it? Loved your piece as well.

@Deborah:Thanks, Deborah! It's always a pleasure to visit your blog.

@Linda: The 140 character story is a challenge, but it's not as hard as you think. Give it a shot! Thanks for the follow...right back at ya!

@glnroz: I WAS grinning! LOL!

@Ashling: What a compliment, quoth the Raven evermore.

Diane said...

The mind is a powerful holding place. Good one. :O)

Sylvia K said...

Terrific take on the pic of the day! Hard to get away from the noise in your mind! Hope you have a great week, Monica!

Sylvia

Mama Zen said...

I like it!

Monica Manning said...

@Diane: And it's so hard to find the exit door.

@Sylvia K: Thanks, Sylvia. I liked yours, too.

@Mama Zen: Thanks! It's always nice when Mama praises!

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

Nice imagery to match the photo. I enjoyed your story!

Reflections said...

Excellent... nice match to the real location.

Monica Manning said...

@LRC: Thanks Lisa. I enjoyed yours, too.

@Reflections: Thanks for dropping by. I stopped by your place and I love all your links!

Susan Fobes said...

Ooh...She is hearing voices... Very different take this week, and definitely a book I would not put down!

Catherine Denton said...

This is probably an odd response, but I laughed because I've SO been there!

Monica Manning said...

@Susan Forbes: I may working the voices into my book. God knows I keep hearing them!

@Catherine Denton: Not odd at all! If we can laugh at them, the voices just might go away! :O)

sylviamorice said...

I hope she manages to stomp loud enough that one day she will silence the voices. Great micro fiction! Cheers~

Monica Manning said...

@sylviamorice: So do I, Sylvia!