Excellent! I love the contrast of the real-life noise with the only-in-her-mind noise.
The stomping feet--she is running from those voices, right? Shivers.
Hearing voices must be so hard.She won't be able to run fast enough. Sad for sure but well written!
Aww, how hard it has to be. Poor her, noise inside and outside never any peace :-(
Such tragedy in such few words. Really great.
Amazing how the mind tunes in to impact of sound effects far beyond the sound! Creative!
Hi MOnica,I am new to micro fictiona nd want to give it a try, Discovered your blog and signed on, please sign on mine http://lindaoconnell.blogspot.com/
A+,,,you're grinning because you know that i am right on this,,,,
Feels a little Edgar Allen Poe--in the best way...what are the voices saying?
@Pat: Sometimes it's hard to distinguish between the two.@Melanie: She is. Let's hope she outruns them!@Peggy: Geez, Peggy! I was sure she would. Now you've got ME scared!@Anyes: No, there isn't.@erik: Thanks, Erik. Always a pleasure when you drop by.
@Grayscale: Isn't it? Loved your piece as well.@Deborah:Thanks, Deborah! It's always a pleasure to visit your blog. @Linda: The 140 character story is a challenge, but it's not as hard as you think. Give it a shot! Thanks for the follow...right back at ya!@glnroz: I WAS grinning! LOL!@Ashling: What a compliment, quoth the Raven evermore.
The mind is a powerful holding place. Good one. :O)
Terrific take on the pic of the day! Hard to get away from the noise in your mind! Hope you have a great week, Monica!Sylvia
I like it!
@Diane: And it's so hard to find the exit door.@Sylvia K: Thanks, Sylvia. I liked yours, too. @Mama Zen: Thanks! It's always nice when Mama praises!
Nice imagery to match the photo. I enjoyed your story!
Excellent... nice match to the real location.
@LRC: Thanks Lisa. I enjoyed yours, too. @Reflections: Thanks for dropping by. I stopped by your place and I love all your links!
Ooh...She is hearing voices... Very different take this week, and definitely a book I would not put down!
This is probably an odd response, but I laughed because I've SO been there!
@Susan Forbes: I may working the voices into my book. God knows I keep hearing them!@Catherine Denton: Not odd at all! If we can laugh at them, the voices just might go away! :O)
I hope she manages to stomp loud enough that one day she will silence the voices. Great micro fiction! Cheers~
@sylviamorice: So do I, Sylvia!
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